16 June, 2010 at 12:51 (Uncategorized)

I am forever

…half in love with easeful death,

Stuck within that moment

…lost in time and space and meaning.

Of seeing you across

…a crowded room…

…the women go from room to room…

a bar and he dropping to his knees

…forever and ever. Amen.

my heart falling with him.

…lay broken on the floor,

All in blue, never mind the eyes

Do I dare and do I dare…

That flash, that sparkle, that weep

…took her dress off, buried it away…

And which held me, solo, flying, groundless

As she looked right out she laughed at him…

And always waiting.

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Request For Criticism

14 June, 2010 at 13:07 (Uncategorized)

Hello.

I just wanted to clarify something – the reason I post poetry (and occaisional prose) up on Livejournal (and then it gets fed across to Facebook) is to receive criticism. Now I know not everyone is comfortable posting crit up in public and I’m happy to recieve comments in person/via email whatever. I also understand that people have better things to do than comment on my work and that’s fine too, but it’s come to my attention that some people haven’t been commenting/critiquing because they think that this is hugely personal stuff and I’ll get upset or something.

This is a clarification, my stuff is put up publically for me to receive comment and criticism so that (hopefully) my writing improves. I want to be a writer, I want to receive your comments whether positive or negative. Completely personal stuff I couldn’t bear people to talk about does not get put up here publically. The reason it’s up here in public is also so that I’m not continually getting buoyed up by friends who think I’m great because they’re friends with me so if you don’t know me then so much the better.

Hope that clarifies things.

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Crossing The Desert Part Two

11 June, 2010 at 19:22 (Uncategorized)

Wow…there’s a size limit for LJ… Part Two

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Crossing The Desert

11 June, 2010 at 19:21 (Uncategorized)

I really would appreciate comment on this one, it’s supposed to be light fantasy but I think it verges on fan-wank at times. How much can people who don’t know the characters actually read this? I know the ending is shit I just couldn’t make anything work Cut for the sanity of people who don’t care about S’au Nam…soon to be Nam L’au

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A Name?

9 June, 2010 at 12:45 (Uncategorized)

Normally, I am resigned,
to happy erotic dreams
about men I left behind a long time ago
or those I vicariously
live through in a variety of ways.
But you,
are new.
And when one of them stalks through my dreams
kissing me in some
Humphrey Bogart way
it is not news.
As I said, you, are new,
it could be some wierd association
of names I suppose.
What colour are your eyes?

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